Brilliant, as usual, but...[]
...I'm kind of put off by the characters' use of the term "zeppelin", since the name ties in directly with the creator of the craft in our world. It is a petty grievance, but to me it kind of feels like a breach. I would suggest changing it somehow. Other than that, superb, as every other chapter. Dragon of The West (talk • contribs) 03:01, June 23, 2010 (UTC)