Talk:Equalists/@comment-1216259-20130118221351

I'm starting to feel as though the recursive clauses in the LoK pages are getting out of control.

Take this passage, for instance:

"While they mostly employ guerrilla attacks, the Equalists, thanks to Hiroshi Sato, also possessed massive amounts of both man and firepower, enough to completely defeat the Metalbending Police Force, take over Republic City in the span of a day, and even defeat the United Forces fleet, although relying very heavily on undercover agents and the element of surprise."

I've bolded everything I feel is redundant. Do we really need to specify every time the weapons are mentioned that Hiroshi Sato built them? If they took over Republic City, is it not implied that they defeated the Metalbending Police? Isn't the last clause just a restatement of "they usually use guerilla tactics"?

This whole thing, if you haven't noticed, is ONE sentence. But it has SEVEN commas. Can you imagine how unreadable this is going to get if this is what we consider to be the proper way to explain a simple characteristic, in this case, the Equalists' fighting methods?